Raul Estrada-Oyuela, a professional diplomat who was the chair of Kyoto Protocol negotiations, pointed out the significance of a good leader to steer the Copenhagen negotiation. He stated that to reach a an international climate agreement requires someone with exceptional skill, knowledge and diplomacy.However, the siuation was not good as the current elected leader did not have the necessary expereince to lead the negotiation. Raul suggested that the leader should be elected from a combined committee of UNFCCC and the Kyoto, which can be considered as a good solution in my opinion.
To understand the necessary qualifications of a well established leader, Raul illustrated his working experiences in previous climate change conferences where he worked with other distinguished diplomats. Firstly, he witnessed Jean-Maurice Ripert's skill in UNFCCC. Ripert, who chaired the Intergovernmental Negotiating Committee, consulted privately with most delegations on every issue to understand their thinking and managed to declare a consensus by moderating the resistance. Secondly, he learnt clever tactics from ambassador Tommy Koh who was the eventual chair of the committee for the Earth Summit overcame the deadlock by making emotional appeals and telling jokes. Lastly, Raul worked together with Angela Merkel for the text before the final stage of Kyoto Protocol .Merkel was devoted to a constrctive compromise and worked very hard to get the consensus despite the protest.
Despite of political estimation shortcomings, the Kyoto Protocol has had an undeniable positive impact in international policy which causes people to put "climate change" at the center of international scene. In order to make futher progress, we have to choose the right person to lead the conference including two mian tasks sheard by working group on long term coorporation and
working group on futher commitments. Although both groups had progressed but not meeting the satisfactory point. Proper delay is acceptable if a good leader can not be found to lead the negotiation.
The summary consists of all the important points in the essay but is not concise enough. The improvement, I personally think, should list all the exceptional skills without going into details that how the writer learnt the skills. Meanwhile, there are sentences which are confusing like the last sentence in the first paragragh. I propose it should be "in his opinion". However this summary does give readers a brif introduction of the essay.
回复删除This summary is well organized and all the points are clearly stated. Sisi has abstracted the article appropriately. Apart from that, this summary is easy to be understood and it has effectively conveyed main idea to the reader. However, there are still points to be improved.
回复删除For introduction, the contents do not flow very smoothly as the thesis statement is not clearly stated and thus controlling idea cannot be easily captured. On the other hand, this summary is well-structured as there is one idea in each paragraph. Essentially, a complete and cohesive paragraph should consist of topic sentence and concluding sentence. Nonetheless, Paragraph #2 consists only of topic sentence and lacks of concluding sentence, perhaps a concluding sentence could be added to make a smooth transition to conclusion.
In my own opinion, a transition word could be added in the final paragraph in order to signal the reader that the summary is concluding. In addition, it would be more efficient in conveying the ideas if there is restatement of main points in the concluding paragraph.
In conclusion, Sisi has wisely abstracted all the main points in the article and there are sufficient examples in the summary to support the main idea. As a result, it gives the reader a clearer view of what the writer is trying to express and thus reader can fully understand the summary.