In general, the essay flows smoothly and logically. it gave me a clear picture of the issue although i did not get a chance to read the article itself.
In the introduction, the back ground of SMR is introduced followed by a question to reader, which attracts reader to find out more about it. Two arguments are used to support SMR, good transition singnals are used to make the flow of paragraphs logically and coherent. The problems of SMR are discussed at the end followed by suggested solutions, which makes the essay more complete.
However, there are a few grammar and spelling mistakes. And some quatationa are not cited properly, for instance, the first sentence in paregraph 3.In addition, the introduction part is divided into 4 small paragraphs, which i think can combine together or reduce to 2 parts.
For the sceond argement, no couterargement is provided and the evidence more emphsis on the difficulty of carry out the greenhouse agreement. so i suggest to use statiatical data of the larger amount of money need to be used for other solutions.
2010年3月30日星期二
2010年3月10日星期三
Summary of Article 3
Raul Estrada-Oyuela, a professional diplomat who was the chair of Kyoto Protocol negotiations, pointed out the significance of a good leader to steer the Copenhagen negotiation. He stated that to reach a an international climate agreement requires someone with exceptional skill, knowledge and diplomacy.However, the siuation was not good as the current elected leader did not have the necessary expereince to lead the negotiation. Raul suggested that the leader should be elected from a combined committee of UNFCCC and the Kyoto, which can be considered as a good solution in my opinion.
To understand the necessary qualifications of a well established leader, Raul illustrated his working experiences in previous climate change conferences where he worked with other distinguished diplomats. Firstly, he witnessed Jean-Maurice Ripert's skill in UNFCCC. Ripert, who chaired the Intergovernmental Negotiating Committee, consulted privately with most delegations on every issue to understand their thinking and managed to declare a consensus by moderating the resistance. Secondly, he learnt clever tactics from ambassador Tommy Koh who was the eventual chair of the committee for the Earth Summit overcame the deadlock by making emotional appeals and telling jokes. Lastly, Raul worked together with Angela Merkel for the text before the final stage of Kyoto Protocol .Merkel was devoted to a constrctive compromise and worked very hard to get the consensus despite the protest.
Despite of political estimation shortcomings, the Kyoto Protocol has had an undeniable positive impact in international policy which causes people to put "climate change" at the center of international scene. In order to make futher progress, we have to choose the right person to lead the conference including two mian tasks sheard by working group on long term coorporation and
working group on futher commitments. Although both groups had progressed but not meeting the satisfactory point. Proper delay is acceptable if a good leader can not be found to lead the negotiation.
To understand the necessary qualifications of a well established leader, Raul illustrated his working experiences in previous climate change conferences where he worked with other distinguished diplomats. Firstly, he witnessed Jean-Maurice Ripert's skill in UNFCCC. Ripert, who chaired the Intergovernmental Negotiating Committee, consulted privately with most delegations on every issue to understand their thinking and managed to declare a consensus by moderating the resistance. Secondly, he learnt clever tactics from ambassador Tommy Koh who was the eventual chair of the committee for the Earth Summit overcame the deadlock by making emotional appeals and telling jokes. Lastly, Raul worked together with Angela Merkel for the text before the final stage of Kyoto Protocol .Merkel was devoted to a constrctive compromise and worked very hard to get the consensus despite the protest.
Despite of political estimation shortcomings, the Kyoto Protocol has had an undeniable positive impact in international policy which causes people to put "climate change" at the center of international scene. In order to make futher progress, we have to choose the right person to lead the conference including two mian tasks sheard by working group on long term coorporation and
working group on futher commitments. Although both groups had progressed but not meeting the satisfactory point. Proper delay is acceptable if a good leader can not be found to lead the negotiation.
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